There was a mouse named Jeffrey that lived inside of the café. He had been living there for so long he knew where everything went, and at what time it would happen. Jeffrey wasn’t the only one living in the café at the time. So were his friends Bob, Tim and Joe. One day Jeffrey decides to go on a walk outside of the café. So he puts his favorite piece of cheese under the table in the café because at that time he knew that no one would be inside of the café. Jeffrey came home hungry for something and anything at all. The only thing that came to mind was his favorite piece of cheese. When he went to go and get his piece of cheese it wasn’t there. The first thing he did was assume Joe took it, But after searching Joe he realized Joe didn’t have his cheese. Next he searched Tim, but neither did Tim have his cheese. Last but not least, Bob, he searches Bob hoping to find the evidence on Bob but he had no luck. As Jeffery’s searching up and down for his cheese he happens to reach his hands in his pocket. As he pulls out his hand, Bob notices that there was cheese all over Jeffery’s hand. He say’s to Jeffery “Hey Jeff, what’s that all over you hand, because to me it looks a lot like cheese”. As Jeffery looks down, he puts everything together and forgets he did put the cheese into his pocket because he was hungry before his walk.
Shaurice, remember to proofread and edit your work before posting it. Remember to put periods at the end of sentences. In addition, I also noticed that you began writing your short story in past tense. However, there were certain parts of the story where you shifted to present tense. Keep your story in one tense.
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